paragraph writing

Essay

Sibling rivalry is one of the main themes in Montana 1948. The book explains the relationship between Wes and his brother Frank. David, the son of Wes and also the narrator states, “ Frank was witty, charming, at smiling ease with his life everything in it. Alongside his brother my father soon seemed somewhat prosaic… Nothing glittered in my fathers wake the way it did in uncle Frank’s.” Sibling competition could be harmful for the whole family. It may cause other siblings or parents to choose sides and everyone gets hurt in the long run. The best way to avoid sibling rivalry is not to state the good and bad qualities in everyone and instead just live with confidence about yourself.

Research

Sibling rivalry has many tactics to follow to avoid and stop the rivalry from happening again. One of the tactics to follow is take the other persons accomplishments and use it as motivation to achieve something on your own (Henry, 2008). This is a good idea, which would help the other sibling not get jealous; however, this wasn’t the case in Montana 1948. In Montana 1948, Wes does not get any motivation from his brother’s achievements. Instead he gets jealous and gets harder on himself. Sibling rivalry could be a result of low self-esteem and eventually could backfire on both of the siblings.

Although the two paragraphs seem very close in relation, there are details in the second paragraph that set them apart from each other. The second paragraph creates an example from an article that someone wrote. I used an idea from someone else’s writing, which helps with coming up with ways to avoid sibling rivalry and how to fix it. In the first paragraph I was very vague and didn’t really get into the story and how to avoid it.


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